Script Doctor Joey’s Screenplay Analysis

As you may have noticed, there has been little activity from me, Script Doctor Eric in a while. Except on Twitter, where I use my smartphone to tweet as @ScriptDrEric

Apologies for radio silence.  I’ve actually landed a full-time job and have full-time things going on in my personal life.  (For way-too-much personal information, hear more about it on a recent episode of Scriptcast – A Screenwriting Podcast  – Episode 56 – Updates)

Unfortunately, this means taking a hiatus from giving screenplay notes.

But, if you need feedback on your screenplay, don’t despair!  Instead of leaving screenwriting without any support, I’ve recruited the best screenwriter I know – Joey.

Script Doctor Joey (also known as TV Consultant Joey) writes television and feature scripts.  In fact, she’s currently working with a producer and manager to package one of her features.  Exciting stuff!

Joey has been giving coverage, notes, and analysis on scripts in the entertainment industry for over a decade.  She’s worked for producers, TV shows, actors, etc.

In fact, I get notes on all my feature screenplays from Joey BEFORE I send them to anyone else.  Seriously.  She’s really, really good.

Really.  Really good.  You guys are lucky.

If Joey didn’t have the time to give notes on feature scripts right now, this post would just be about how I’m taking a hiatus from reading scripts.

But, because she is available I know I am leaving you in good hands.

Because if you want help – serious help – on your screenplay, there is no one better than Joey.

So if you’re a new screenwriter or a screenwriter who just finished a new screenplay, just go to the Screenwriting Services Page and order Joey’s service.  I’ve taken my services off of there, as you’ll see – it’s just Joey now.

Which I trust will be fine.  In fact, pretty soon you might just be asking: “Script Doctor Eri-who?”

Seriously.  Best of luck to you all.  And…



Screenplay Notes

Update: Script Doctor Eric is currently on hiatus from giving screenplay notes.  Script Doctor Joey now gives all notes on the site.  Please read: Script Doctor Joey’s Screenplay Analysis – and then get notes from her.  Seriously.  -Eric


Are you looking for notes on your screenplay from a produced screenwriter and freelance script reader?

Great.  Head on over to Script Doctor Eric’s Screenwriting Services and get the help you need today!

Oh, you don’t think you need notes or feedback on your script?  Your screenplay is perfect because you mom and your best friend liked it?

Kidding.  But in all seriousness, screenwriting is a slightly different beast than other types of writing.  And it takes a different type of beast to give you good feedback.

What type of beast are we talking about, and when can we drop the “beast” analogy?*

To tell if your screenplay is worthy of the PDF file you converted it into, you’ll need feedback from someone who knows what they are talking about.

That is, get notes from someone who has read a lot of screenplays.

Better yet, get notes on your script from someone who is a screenwriter.

Coincidentally* Script Doctor Eric is both of those things.

He also writes in the third person when marketing his services.

But this won’t last for long.  It’s really too tiring…

So, if you’d like my** analysis of what works, what doesn’t work, and how to make your screenplay better, check out my Screenwriting Services.

If not, I really, really hope you get someone to look at your work who knows what they are talking about.

Because I’ve read far too many screenplays where the writer obviously hasn’t gotten good feedback.

And I would rather not read any more like that.

Best of luck, and..



* This is not a coincidence.  You see, I wrote those sentences before KNOWING I was talking about myself.  No.  Really.  :)

** Told you it wouldn’t last.

Support “Laps – Season 2”

Some might say this web series picked for this week’s Support Something Sunday runs circles around other Kickstarter projects.

Others might say it has a leg up on them.

And still others might say…okay, that’s enough.

For today’s Support Something Sunday, the web series I’ve chosen to support is “Laps,” by Chad Diez.

The series is beginning its second season.  I just learned about it through one of my former (and future?) clients, whose name may or may not be Chad Diez.

Though I didn’t catch much of the first season, it’s been fun catching up on past episodes.  And the new season looks bigger and better.  Check it out:

Chad is really professional, and great at getting press for his work.  The series seems to be improving as it goes along, and the main character has actually lost weight from all the running he has had to do while filming.


So kick in a few bucks and be a part of the web series Laps – Season 2.

Or sponsor another project.  Maybe something green.  Because it’s not only Support Something Sunday, it’s St. Patrick’s Day.

Of course, you already knew that.

But it just dawned on me.

Because I’m actually writing this post a few days before.

Seriously.  And…



Do you have a short, feature, or web series you’d like help raising money for on Kickstarter or Indiegogo? Drop me the link through MY CONTACT PAGE and I”ll check it out…and you just might be featured on the next Support Something Sunday!


What Happened to Logline Friday?

Logline Friday – your favorite free weekly online script logline competition* – is still going.   So every Friday, feel free to tweet or email me your best logline.

Don’t know the rules to Logline Friday?  Check out the original post about it – Logline Friday Rules and Everything

Unfortunately, I don’t have time to declare a winner.  So just do it for your own practice for now!

Why haven’t I had time declare winners?  To be honest, I’ve been a bit busy with other stuff.

Also, while we’re being honest, I haven’t yet delivered all the free notes to the winners.  I feel like Robert Frost in the woods!**

But the entire point of Logline Friday is not to win a prize, or free screenplay notes from me.  The point is for screenwriters to practice their loglines on a regular basis.

But I know, it’s tough when there isn’t an incentive.   The plan for Logline Friday is actually to create a running competition, where winners earn points each week, and other writers can vote on who is the winner.

That way, we’ll all be involved, and I don’t have to be the one who gets angry emails that say such things as: “Why didn’t you pick my logline the logline you picked was stupid, I don’t care if you’re a produced screenwriter and freelance script reader whose read thousands of scripts, your opinion SUCKS!”


So stay tuned, as Logline Friday gets a facelift…like everything else in Hollywood!

That’s all for now.  And…



* I don’t actually know if it’s your favorite.

** Poet who wrote something about “promises to keep” and “miles to go before sleep” or something like that.***

*** I actually have this poem memorized, I just wanted to seem less of a dork by casually paraphrasing it.. :-/

How to Find Time to Write

Here’s a post from Phillip Mottaz, whose wonderful blog is a candid and fun exploration of what it’s like to be a screenwriter and stay-at-home dad.

Even though the post below is written from the prospective of a parent finding time to write, I feel like it’s a good lesson for all of us.  After all, if a full-time parent can find time to write, can’t the rest of us?  -Script Doctor Eric (About Eric)

Phillip Mottaz 

I have to clarify that I don’t know how anybody does this, juggling parenting and a career. I cannot fathom how my parents did it, or yours, or anybody.

I sometimes listen to Kevin Smith’s “Fatman on Batman” podcast, and he recently admitted to watching “The Dark Knight Part 2” — a movie 2.5 hours long — 12 times. It had only come out about a week or so prior to the recording, and all I could think was, “How the hell did he find the time to do that?” Granted, he’s a successful movie maker, and his wife probably doesn’t have to work to support them, so she can stay with their daughter… but come on! I’m writing this while “watching” a movie I’ve seen already, and I mostly have it on to feel like a person I used to be. An irresponsible person.

So right off the bat, let me be clear: I’ve found there really IS no time to write.  Especially when the kid is awake, and if anyone out there knows of a solution, I’d love to hear it. Honestly. Any time your kid is awake contains every possible hazard, emotion and situation you could imagine without actually resulting in something that would feel like a tangible achievement. Oh, you’re growing a person, sure, but we won’t know the results of that growth until later, and possibly through intense therapy sessions. When you’re teaching/molding/messing up your awake kid, the best you can hope for as far as writing goes is sending yourself a text message saying something like “Act Two should be exciting.”

Suffice it to say, I’ve mastered this parents-who-write thing.

The sleep times, on the other hand, can be marginally productive, especially if your standards of productivity are low. As your brain turns into Brie from hours of re-re-re-reading the same book over and over again, it sometimes takes a while to get cracking. The trick, I’ve found (besides low standards) is routine. Not just for yourself, but for your child.

My wife excels at organization, so from the beginning of Henry’s life, we had cataloged most of his major daily events, of which there were three: when he ate, when he slept, and when he had a diaper change. The nurses encouraged us to keep track while we were still in the hospital, and it carried over as part of our routine. It sounds insane (and, granted, the diaper log went away), but charting when he ate and when he slept and for how long helped us develop a schedule. We were able to anticipate our days a little easier, and this meant I could plan my work day a little easier. For the first two years of Henry’s life, he took two or three naps a day, at least an hour a piece. Considering there was always something to clean, food to prepare or my own cleanliness to attend to, this often allowed for a good 30-ish minutes at a time.

Admittedly, I didn’t always use that free time wisely. I watched movies (aka “research?”), wrote emails, checked Facebook. Typical idiot stuff. But the very disciplined writer-parent — the kind who would probably excel at getting their child on a sleep and nap schedule — could make some real headway with this time.

As Henry has grown up, and grown more aware of, well, everything, he has also dropped to one nap. He is now three-and-a-half, and down to one nap a day, if that. Some days he doesn’t nap at all. These have been psychologically trying on me, the stay-at-home parent, mostly (I think) because I’ve come to rely on these naps for writing and working and relaxing. I’m addicted to the naps, and sometimes I will rock Henry for an hour for the chance at a nap. Sometimes more if I fall asleep, too.

When you get to that point, you jam. You develop an ability to work fast. You may not be “good,” but you’ll cover a lot of ground, and sometimes that’s what it takes. I hope that’s what it takes.

So that’s the big advice, for being a writer-parent and for life in general: when you get that opportunity, jump on it. Seize the nap day.